Fabulous 5th grade writers use:
- Leads that hook their reader (you don't want them to doze off, right?)
- Endings that stick with their reader like peanut butter, sticky buns, or gorilla glue (keep them wondering and wanting more, right?)
Publish the spectacular lead and fabulously sticky ending from your most current story.
Write your rough draft and peer edit with buddy first.
20 comments:
My lead that hooks the reader is:
One dark,foggy,frezzing, and drizzly morning a little boy named Max was silently sleeping in his cozy warm bed. As the mattress squeals while Max awakens drowsily he hears a terrifying sound coming from his closet.
My sticking bun ending is this:
For the rest of Max's life he lived alone,up on a hill,in pure darkness. No one ever heard from Max again! Until one dark,foggy,freezing, and drizzly morning, like the day his sisters scared him. Soon people hear taunting and deadful screams coming from his house.Run! Out of this town now! If not, Max will haunt you for the rest of your life! LEAVE NOW!!
Hi Mrs.Garcia,
My hooking lead is:
One overcast and stormy night Tasha Monroe was in her warm and cozy bed, almost asleep when she heard the most horafying groan then an even MORE horafying laugh.
My sticky bun ending is:
Bart grabbed the painting and shook it around. The ghost reached his arm out and pulled Bart in.
He was never seen again.
The two ghosts come out anytime someone enters the basement.
The painting now lays there on the cement floor, frame cracked, glass broken, and all you can see is the little outline of the two ghosts.
When ever the two ghosts hear the door to the basement open the come out groaning and laughing.
It is now a haunted house for Halloween. Check it out.
Sydney
October 30,2009 it was one day before Halloween.Joe,Bob,and I were walking down scare street and something flickerd in the distance.2 minutes after that there was a dreadful creek.Joe and Bob dashed over to the most fighting house on the block.I had to gm too because that street was giving mr the creeps.(My ending)That's my story for you. I'm Sara Haland and I'm seventeen.My Birthday was on October 30,2009.I died because I was so scared I had a heart attack and no one helped me.So now I'm gone and I'm comeing for you.SHOW!ZING!AAAAAAAAA!HAHAHAHAHA!
Begining
It was a foggy night when the moon was full a 16 year old girl/whitecat named Lilla was at a lake called Lake White Cat waiting for her boyfriend named Logan which was a boy/blackcat.When all of a suden she heard a scream.
Ending
Some people say they can still see Lilla and Logan walking across the green grass on a moonlit night saying to one anothers hearts.
My story is called "The Thing in the Closet". Hook beging:
On a damp, foggy, frigid night Sam a 15 year old boy was in jis room. His room never had a light in room because when they moved in a large box hit the light and broke it. Sam heard chatering coming from his closet.
Sticky bun ending:
Have you ever been through what Sam went through? Do want to go through what Sam went through? Watch out the evil present is coming after you!!BOO!
My lead that hooks the reader is:
One day mamma was feeding bun the baby.She was feeding him mash potatoes and all that baby stuf you know what I mean?Well you get the point.
My sticky bun ending is this:Fart,Fart,Fart,Fart,fart,Fart, Bun was farting 1 millon times fast while Sarah was changing him.But Sarah was saying
"Bun your so grose"! in a poplar kind of way.But all the sudden bun farted as loud as he could and it sounded like his
"FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFPT"It was so loud it knocked every one down it shook the whole Erith and knocked Bun right out.Sarah got up in and said
"Boy you got to stop that farting or your going to strain your self".booch got up and said
"Man that felt like an erth quake"! like a little tiny worried boy.and thay was the storry of the farting Bun on mommas birth day untell part3.
My lead is: The night is cold, Will is jogging to the woods by his house. When Will got in the trees closed around him.
Sticky Bun ending:
Marliene and Will are getting trapped in the quick sand. Before Marliene got trapped in the quicksand she jumped over the trees. Will screamed: "Hellllpp-p-p-p!"
"Grab on to this vine"
"No"
Do you want to die?"
Fine.
Then Will grabbed on and they ran frantically out of the woods.
One day there was a boy named BEAR boy and one day BEAR boy said mom why did you name me BEAR boy? why dinit you name me james or something? i don't no said mrs.v ok good night said bear boy i.But some one has to stop him said jimmy well we can't but you can.I'm a man said jimmy go head said bear boy but don't come back crying to me ok.
Hi Ms.Garcia this is Janel.
My lead that hooks the reader is.
One snowy foggy night Millisa and her parents were on there way to bed when something in the kitchen went BOOOOOM!!!!.
this is my stickt ending.
No one ever broke into Millisa's house ever again Millisa's family was very jolly the two guys got out of jail and now they are going after someone else BOOOOOM!!! "what was that" said Harmony? "I'm coming for you"!!! DA DA DA DA DA
LEAD TO MY STORY:MR.MR ROMO he loves to wake up and drink blood and go to sleep he does that for 10 hours.Ending:Then he drinks blood then goes to his friends all day then gets blood again.
Fish hook beginng - ''Oh ow that realy hurt'. I'm Harry I have strange crazy hair. I am realy bungling, I wear the same clouthes every day that is blue jeans, blue shirt, and a brown jacket.I am not that smart well Loyd thinks I am.Yeah and I'm Loyd I wear a pair of blue pants, green t-shirt, and a gray jacket except when I go to work. I'm a limo driver. I'm not that smart Harry's smarter.Well do we have some crazy adventures to tell you about.'Shayeah we sure do!
Sticky bun ending- 'Werent those storys funny? I sure thought they were!In the next book we are going on a mission. We have to deliver this suit case to a women that Loyd dropped off and saw her leave it in the air port.HE'S IN LOVE WITH HER!Am not' Yeah you just dont want to admitt it Loyd.We have to go to Aspen to give it to her. Well thanks for reading our storys. If these come popular we will make a movie!We made them so you have to use the bathroom before you read these or you will be in some deep doo doo.Well see you later dont foret to use the batheroom before you read the new storys well bye!!!!
fanstastic lead: One superior sunny day a goverment agent named Mitch was looking for 4 guinea pigs named Blaster,Jarez,Harry,and James. While Mitch was searching for them they were driving little toy cars. Blaster was playing Just Dance by Lady Gaga very,very,very loud!!!!! Like BLAST YOUR EAR OFF LOUD!!!!!!!
Stiky bun ending: ZOOM...CRASH...CREEEEEEEK!!!!! "Oh my blueberry pancakes, Blaster just got in a crash!." yelled Jarez. Blaster yelled out "HELP ME!!!" Jarez,James,and Harry rushed over to help Blaster and when they reached Blaster they found him laying on the floor with his tongue hangin right out of his head!!! "What is going on in your head?" James asked. Blaster replied "TWEET TWEET TWEET why!?". "Nothing nevermined" James said in an evil voice!
My lead that hooks the reader is: one static dark night Mrs wolf was walking through the graveyard. As she was walking she herd somthing jump behind a tree "probly a cat she thought" But she noticei that strange fog started to appear I GOT TO GET OUT OF HERE! She yelled as she was sprinting but somthing was running with her for the gate but it was rusted to badly.
My sticky bun ending is: As she was running somthing grabed her leg and imedit pain was in her left leg somthing was eating her alive she herd moens and grones of in to the disstance others jonied in she was gone in a flash.
Hey Mrs.Garcia,
My sticky bun beining is: It was a dark cold night on October 31.I was baby sitting on Halloween night!I didn't want to baby sit my cousion shy on Halloween but I had to show my mom I could stay at home all alone.
sticky bun ending
Now if you start baby sitting at 12years old you will have frighning white ghost night merse every day of your life!!!Mua ha-ha
My lead is:
BOOM! CRASH! The thunder lightning rored as two boys hid onder a car.
My ending is:
After the storm the two boys saw a man a misty man. The man was a ghost, the ghost turned to them and the ghost screamed with the two boy's harts in his hand!
My super duper begeining is:"AAAUH!Waaaaaa!" Dude that was ugh...what was that again? you figer that on your own Mr.Dombo! My sticky ending is:30minites later BOOO!WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!
My hooking lead is:
There were two boys named Jake and Max.Max tells Jake."Lets go on hike."
"Jake said "Okay."
So they got there stuff ready.
Max put on his sandals. Jake looked at him and said "Whats your problem."So Max put his shoes on and they left.
Sticky Bun Ending:
But one thing Jake left behind was his leg under the boulder.
Some say Max did it and others say he was dragged away by coyotes and ateten others say he might be a forest boy with one leg.But Jakes dissapearence was an untld mysery.
My lead is:
It was midnight. Mr.Shorpsharp was looking for his mirror. When he saw it he ran up to it. Then he tried picking the mirror up and touched the glass...and a ghost appeared in the mirror!!
My sticky ending is:
When Mr.Shorpsharp got into the boat he heard a blood curling scream. He ordered the captain to get away from Norway as fast as possible. But the ghost had plans. The ghost had carefully placed C-4 plastic charges around the bottom of the boat. There were 3 in the bow and stern of the ship. Despite the fact at how big and beautiful the boat was the ghost wanted to put an end to Mr.Shorpsharp's life. Once the ghost was safely off the ship, the charged went off. Will Mr.Shorpsharp survive? Or will the ghost's plans go as he wanted them to?
My lead that hooks the reader is:
one freaky Saterday night, Guss the dog was wandering down Main Street when he saw a horrible noisy crocadile shaped figure frozen around the corner.
my sticky bun ending is:
Guss walked home slowely he remembered the shape he saw around the corner of the coffe shop.
the next day Guss came back to that place were the crocadile was, he looked around the corner and guess waht he saw?
YEP! HE SAW A STACK OF COFFE AROUND THE CORNER!!!
"HMMM. maybe that crocadile left?"
he thought as he winked.
Elina! How fun that you responded to our blog!
Your intro is a grabber and your ending is unexpected and therefore "sticky."
Keep writing my dear. You have the gift!
Thanks for staying in touch too.
All the best,
Ms. Garcia
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